Jasmine Hart

Hi, This is so beautiful. Your imagery is wonderful and you create a great sense of place. The emotion of the speak comes through nicely without overwhelming the visual effect. ...

Hi, This was a very powerful piece. You put your idea across skillfully. I found this really heart-wrenching. The opening lines instantly drew me in and I loved your use ...

Hi, Usually my advice would be to lose the rhyming pattern and avoid archaic-sounding sentiments ("Do not speak of love, I beg") but honestly I don't feel that this applies ...

Hi, The title really drew me in. I wasn't aware of this quote and found it really interesting. I loved the opening couplet and the final address to Mother Teresa ...

Hi Lava, I really enjoyed this. The title caught my attention. The first four lines were really beautiful and endearing. I'm not sure about "bleed" and "red" - maybe too ...

Hi, This is really beautiful. The title instantly drew me in and the first line was really great. I love the personality which shines through in: "And you can’t listen ...

Hi, This is an interesting slant on a love poem. I really enjoyed: "You capture things that you see- Beautiful beaches, The people you know and love- And share them ...

Hi, This is really beautiful. The tone is perfect, it flows nicely, and the emotion comes across powerfully without obscuring your effective use of language. I especially enjoyed: "Where laughter ...

Hi, This is beautiful and you handle the form skillfully and effectively. Your use of language is great, and the piece flows nicely as a whole. I especially enjoyed "The ...

Hi, I think the rhythm works very nicely here for the most part, and I like how the poem progresses from beginning to end, especially the final line. I'm not ...

Hi, This is an interesting concept. I think that the present tense works very well here - it helps to build tension and make the reader feel closer to the ...

1. Should we continue with Review Teams on Review Days? I don't really know anything about Review Teams because I was gone a while, but I'm all for anything that ...

Hi, This was a very interesting piece. I loved the internal rhyme of "dreams streaming" and "wrapped around your ankles." The fourth stanza in particular was great - perfectly concise ...

Hi, This is beautiful. Your imagery is lovely and very powerful. I especially enjoyed "the palms in your backyard withered" and "my handwriting is a cursive maze." I love the ...

Hi Jagged, This was really beautiful. I loved it so much. You use language expertly. The opening lines instantly drew me in and the pause after "listen" was very effective. ...